I think the l̵i̵v̵e̵ (Children số nhiều nên life cũng cần số nhiều) `->` lives of children today are very different from t̵h̵e̵ ̵l̵i̵v̵e̵s̵ (Lặp từ) `->` those of children in the past.

Firstly, children in the past g̵o̵ (Chia động từ sai) `->` went to school on foot(.) (Cần tách câu) However, children i̵n̵ (Thừa) now go to school by many means of transportation (Cần bổ sung để nghĩa câu rõ). For example, they go to school by bikes. electric bikes and so on.

Secondly, in the past(,) c̵h̵i̵d̵lr̵e̵n̵ ̵e̵n̵j̵o̵y̵ `->` children enjoyed (Chia động từ sai) themselves by t̵h̵e̵y̵ ̵p̵l̵a̵y̵ (sau by là Ving/N/O...) `->` playing tug of war, hide and seek, f̵l̵y̵ `->` flying kites(,) (Nên đặt dấu phẩy trước "and") and o̵n̵ (Thừa) so on for fun, but now children play computer games, watch films, and listen to music.

F̵i̵n̵n̵a̵l̵y̵ `->` Finally, in the past, children s̵t̵u̵d̵y̵ ̵a̵t̵ ̵h̵o̵m̵e̵ ̵v̵i̵l̵l̵a̵g̵e̵ `->` studied in their home village (động từ, mạo từ sai, bổ sung thêm để rõ nghĩa) or hometown, but now c̵h̵i̵l̵d̵r̵e̵n̵ `->` they study in other towns or abroad. In conclusion, children's l̵i̵f̵e̵   `->` lives today i̵s̵ `->` are much better than in the past.

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I believe that today's children's lives are very different from those of previous generations. To begin with, in the past, children walked to school. On the other hand, children now attend school in a variety of ways. They ride bicycles, electric bikes, and other forms of transportation to school. Secondly, children used to have fun by playing tug of war, hide and seek, flying kites, and other activities, but now they prefer to play computer games, watch movies, and listen to music. Finally, children used to study in their hometown or village, but now they study in other towns or even abroad. In summary, children's lives today are much better than those in the past.

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I think the life of children today is very different from the lives of children in the past. Firstly, children in the past go to school on foot however, children (chỗ này không cần thêm in nhé) now go to school by any means. For example, they go to school on bikes, electric bikes, and so on. Secondly, in the past children enjoy themselves by they play tug of war, hiding and seeking flying kites and on so on for fun, but now children play computer games, watch films, and listen to music. Finally, in the past, children study at home village or hometown, but now children study in other towns or abroad. In conclusion, children's life today is much better than in the past.

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