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My future home will be in a land filled with candy like a fairy tale. The confectionery here will never spoil. The kids will be happy to come here. Now, I will introduce my future home. It would be a big enough villain to hold a lot of people. 3-storey house, lots of rooms. The whole house will be made all of candies. In front of the house there will be two food plants, when you break their fruit you will have the food you want. In this land, everything will be made from confectionery. At the door will be robots, they can do anything you ask. In my house there will be a big swimming pool filled with chocolates and candies. Each room will have its own function. This will be the living room, the other will be the most modern smart TV, the rest will be a sofa that can automatically move and massage. In the kitchen, there will be a stove, a refrigerator, and a microwave, where the robots usually prepare food. In each bedroom, there will be a large bed, an air conditioner. And there are countless other rooms. I love my future home and I wish it would come true one day.

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My future home will be in a land filled with candy-like a fairy tale. The confectionery here will never spoil. The kids will be happy to come here. Now, I will introduce my future house. It will be a vill big enough to accommodate a lot of people. The house has 3 floors and lots of rooms. The whole house will be made all with confectionery. There will be two food plants in front of the house, when you break their fruit you will have the food you want. In this land, everything will be made from confectionery. At the door will be robots, they can do anything you ask. In my house, there will be a big swimming pool full of chocolates and candies. Each room will have its ( bỏ own ) function. This will be the living room, the other will be the most modern smart TV, and the other will be a sofa that can automatically move and massage. In the kitchen, there will be a stove, a refrigerator, and a microwave oven, this is where the robots often prepare food. In each bedroom, there will be a large bed and an air conditioner. And there are countless other rooms. I love my future home and I wish it would come true one day.

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